Locked Away (4), SC

Last week we introduced Conor and got a taste of his roommate Lucas. This week I’m introducing the second protagonist and leading lady: Natalie. Some of you guessed that the girl by the car will have an important role and you’re right! Natalie was on a waiting list for admittance to the school and joins the cast mid fall semester. We find out later in the chapter that the girl Natalie is replacing is her roommate’s best friend who became pregnant and was pulled from the school. We start as Natalie’s parents say goodbye before she enters her new dormitory.

I wish she wouldn’t fuss. Her hands skim my body, pulling at loose threads and lint; lingering on my shoulders. Her warm hazel eyes swirl with sadness and pride. I know she wants to pull me in for a tight hug, a Ma’s hug, but she knows I can’t. The best I can do is take her hand. She squeezes it tight and tells me she loves me. But I stare at my leather gloved hands entwined with her pink painted fingers.
“Natalie dear, we’re so happy, us and Doctor March are so proud of your progress. This is a huge step. I know you’ll do great.”

So a little short and sweet but Natalie has more stories to tell. Unfortunately that’ll have to wait for next time. Until then, stay safe out there!

Story Synopsis:
Memories. An Inspiration. A Curse.
Between sports, school work, his tutoring and being the family peacekeeper, Conor has no time to dwell on the past. But when a new girl arrives to Esterhaven in the middle of first semester she not only brings the heart wrenching past to life but also unlocks a danger seething inside him.

Natalie, having limited contact with people her age, struggles with adopting to life at the prestigious boarding school. She longs to live in the moment, meet friends and have hobbies like her peers. But something inside her holds her back. A curse, which plagued her from childhood, challenges her need for normalcy. But when murder interrupts her first week of classes she can’t help but feel responsible. After all, death follows her everywhere.

Locked Away is my current WIP which was created in the vein of Beauty and the Beast meets time travel. Odd I know but here it is.

Photo by Roger Bradshaw

12 thoughts on “Locked Away (4), SC

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  2. Diane Burton

    I feel bad for both of them. Mother’s (usually) love to hug, esp. when their baby is going off on her own. I can’t understand why Natalie can’t hug. What’s preventing her? Why gloves? All questions that will keep me reading.


    1. I’m sorry about the link issue… I apparently submitted the wrong link and it sent you to the previous post instead. But I am glad you found me! Thank you for the feed back, hopefully some of your questions will be answered soon. 🙂


  3. Nice writing!

    I read a lot of YA–especially dystopian/PR, scifi type YA–one of my favorite genres. I am intrigued by what I’ve read so far.

    I don’t know why, but when I clicked on the link, it took me to your post from last week? It might be the reason you have a limited number of comments–if others had the same problem. 🙂 I’ll try to check that earlier in the day next week.

    Also, we’ve relaxed the rules at wewriwa. I wrote about it in my weekly post today. It will save participants from having to use creative punctuation, or from writing run-on sentences to try to complete a scene or a thought in their snippet. 🙂

    Have a great week, Brittany! 🙂


    1. I am so glad you’re liking it so far. This is my first attempt at a PR genre so I’m glad I’m on the right track! 🙂

      And the link issues was totally my fault! I checked it out and it seems like when I signed up the box auto filled to my last link which was (#3). Sorry about that, I’m still working out the bug with WordPress etc. haha. :s

      I saw your post regarding the rules and I’m so excited to incorporate the changes in this weeks post. It’s so exciting! thanks for making the change, I think it’s going to help a lot of us out.

      Thanks for touching base and giving me the update Teresa! Have a great week 🙂


  4. julieevelynjoyce

    I love the way you’ve written this scene. There’s nothing quite like a ‘Ma’s hug,’ and even though she doesn’t experience one here, you can still feel the emotion. Great job!

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