Welcome my friends to another round of Weekend Writing Warriors blog hop. As summer cools into autumn I’m preparing for cozy writing season with warm tea, blankets and fuzzy socks. And what better to add to the prime reading season, then these weekly 8-10 line snippets. Don’t forget to visit the rest of this week’s participants once you leave here. There’s something for everyone and it’s a perfect way to sample other writer’s work.
I’m introducing a new work in progress that’s been on the back burner for a while now. Last week we opened with Ambrose, a student Mage, as she competes in the Academy’s end of year practical examinations. We continue with the duel with a rival student Evi.
Snippet:
Evi stood opposite her with her dark oak emerald staff poised for the next attack. Usually, Ambrose would have an advantage over an Earth Mage like her, but her timing was off today. She even fumbled the simplest of protective barriers. But as Evi’s crooked smirk creased her lips, she imagined rubbing her flawless face into the dirt.
She moved her staff to the front of her body, inhaling to steady her nerves. They dueled against each other for five years and this final practical wasn’t anything special. She knew Evi used her speed to gain the advantage—which worked— considering how many times she ate dirt during this duel.
Another deep breath, she shifted her feet to prepare for the onslaught about to descend upon her.
Evi extended her staff, pointing the glowing emerald at her feet and made a spectacle of tapping the ground three times. She relaxed her shoulders, rubbing her palm over the translucent sandstone crowning her staff.
And to finish the scene:
The ground under her quivered; Evi was ready. Ambrose’s staff pulsated under her palm. Obeying the call she drags the tip across the arena floor as a fiery spark ignites at her feet.
It seems like Ambrosse isn’t ready to back down just yet. But will she have what she takes to win or will her magic fall flat? Until next time, stay safe my friends.
Potential Blurb:
In Umara, two races dominate the continent. Mages, those who possess the ability to harness magic, and Innocents, those who can’t. Never is this divide greater than the Kingdom of Ancients. Here the Mages serve the Gods while the Innocents serve the Mages.
Ambrose, a Mage at the prestigious Academy, struggles to reach the top academic ranks. Wanting a break from her studies she volunteers to escort an disgraced official through the campus to a secret meeting with the headmistress. Little does she know he will set her on a dangerous path as she stumbles on the Council’s terrible new enterprise.
Caught in the middle is Rebekah, a servant to the powerful Mage Chancellor, who dreams of her freedom beyond the sand dunes. However, Innocents are owned by their masters and few free their servants on their own accord. Chancellor Godfrey isn’t an exception. If she wants out, she’s on her own. But the Council halls hold deadly whispers and one misstep spells disaster.
Can both girls survive the desert and make it out of the kingdom alive? Or is their fate as precarious as the sand under their feet?
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Exciting scene and tension build up here. Love it!!
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Thank you Jeff!
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Love the tension of the scene. I look forward to reading more.
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Thank you Karen!
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I like her sense of self control under these difficult circumstances. Great details, just enough to make it ‘real’ and not to overdo the scene setting. Really enjoyed the snippet!
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Thanks Veronica!
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It might just be part of a magic ritual, but I enjoyed seeing what a showman (woman) Evi is, with all the tapping, etc. Is it an attempt to psych out the competition, or are these things important.
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There’s a certain physically to the magic system but Evi is showing off here for sure.
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Yes, I got that impression.
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I love the description of this staff: “dark oak emerald staff”
Nice set up for this duel! 🙂
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Thank you, I’ve done so much research on this magic system that it’s absurd. But the staffs they use are critical to their character/magic and (in some cases) the plot. I’m glad my efforts aren’t lost!
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It sounds like the battle has just gotten started good. And obviously no love lost between these two. It will be interesting to see who rubs whose face in the dirt.
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Love the line about rubbing her flawless face into the dirt.
Tweeted.
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Thanks, she’s clearly not the jealous time (sarcasm). I pictured her as the wallflower type but the more time I spend with her, I think she has other ideas.
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I enjoyed how tangible the magic is in this snippet. Looking forward to seeing Ambrose’s response.
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Thanks Alexis!
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Definitely a lot of tension in this duel. Curious to know who will win and how.
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